Second Draft Feedback
Comments on Critical Investigation second draft: Mark: 37 Grade: B This is a fascinating essay – really enjoyable to read and strong on engagement and critical autonomy. However, it’s lacking research and this is the critical area that will hold you back from the A/A* grade unless you address it. Work on the following: · A few typos and clumsy sentences to address but not far off in terms of written English. · One aspect of the above is topic sentences – on quite a few of these you need to make sure the essay is ruthlessly focused on the question. The topic sentence should clearly tell the reader how you are developing your argument using wording from the question. Occasionally, you only reach that point two or three sentences in. · Textual analysis is still lacking a bit of depth/detail… not offering the depth of meaning or level of analysis required for the top level at A2. · It’s still very light on research – where is your a